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Love is that cutey
Who's in your science class.

Love is how you blush
When they look your way.

Love is the tingle
You get when they say "Hi."

Love is how your heart pounds
When you're close to them.

Love is the joy
You feel as a couple.

Love is the rush
You get when you kiss.

Love is the excitement
You have when they say "I do."

Love is the care
You two show for your children.

Love is the fear
You feel when the hospital calls.

Love is the dread
You feel as you make your way there.

Love is the sorrow
You feel when they're gone.

Love is the memories
You have of that cutey.
This is poem #2 out of 100 in the 100 day poem challenge.

I was chatting with my friend Alex on Facebook and I told him I was trying to think of a poem to write. So he said a romantic one. And this is what i got. Finally a poem that isn't negative. Yeah! This isn't based on anyone I just wrote how I think it all would start and how it would end for both a boy and a girl. I was going to say him but then it could throw off some guys if they were reading it.

Please tell me what you think! All feedback is great! Be it good, bad, short or long, I want to hear it! I want to improve for all of my lovely watchers. :D

:rose: Invictus47
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vampie-knight-roks Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, god job. I really like it. Kinda convinent becuase the guy I like loves science, even if I'm not in the same class, but we both love science. Do you think that counts? Haha, but no really. You did a great job on this.
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Invictus47 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :iconbegplz: You're the second person too say that the person they like is in science. :) I guess I picked the right class. And I think that counts for something.
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vampie-knight-roks Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. Really? Wow, cool, okay. I guess you did and it is a great subject. Just saying. :) Really? Thank you for thinking it counts. :)
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TheOneFallenAngel Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
DAMN THIS IS SO BRILLIANT. :iconbeatingheartplz: W :iconbeatingheartplz:
I Felt as Though You Were Bringing My Emotions Up, Up Into What Felt Like Heaven,
Until Of Course You Brought Upon The Fear And Dread, Bringing Them Down,
Like A Roller Coaster. I Love This So Much. :heart:
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Invictus47 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconohstopityouplz:
Wow. I can't believe my poem did that. And I thought that it was really simple and wasn't going to be all that great. But I've had great comments and a lot of favs.
Thank you so much! :D
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TheOneFallenAngel Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:icondragonkekeplz: It's Way Better Than Simple! And Np Hun. :icondragonhugplz:
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stjimmyrocks Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student General Artist
ha the guy I like is in my science class.
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Invictus47 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! I can connect with people through my poetry. :) I was going to put the class that my crush is in but then that would be way too obvious.
Let's keep that hush hush... ;)
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stjimmyrocks Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student General Artist
you definitely can! It's so weird when you write a huge explanation and no one faves it :O and yeah, that might be smart ;)
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Invictus47 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know. It doesn't make sense to me.
:meow:
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